Thursday, August 29, 2013

Unrequested Critique - The Nan Tu - Southern Swallow Book II (Nan Ya) 


The Nan Tu, Author,  Edward C. Patterson, 2009. 482 pages.

Selection Method: I picked the most recent book posted in the Amazon Fantasy blurb thread.

Author has published 22 books and it shows.

Cover

The cover shows some traditional Chinese art collaged artfully.

Formatting

Formatting is excellent.

Thumbnail Description

People living in an interesting time.

Blurb

"We all lived in the shadow of K’ai-feng’s ashes now. No denying it. However safe we felt, the world hung by a silken thread." So begins the second book of the Southern Swallow series - The Nan Tu (The Southern Migration) and, like the first book, The Academician, it is told by K’u Ko-ling, servant to the Grand Tutor, Li K’ai-men. The Emperor Kao has proclaimed that his court and government will migrate to the south, a progress filled with adventure, intrigue, war and tragedy, thus setting a series of events in play that shaped the Middle Kingdom. 

Set on the broad canvas of Sung Dynasty China, The Nan Tu is a tale of love, separation and sacrifice. Yet heroes emerge from the ashes and restoration is within their grasp. From the mountain lairs of bandits to the sweep of the fleet at sea, The Nan Tu will transport you to a world that should have never been forgotten. Still, there are more important things than empires and history. There’s love and destiny - the destiny of Li K’ai-men’s relics and the enlistment of his helpmates to guard over the membrane of time.

Opening Sentences

We all lived in the shadow of K’ai-feng’s ashes now. No denying it. However safe we felt, the world hung by a silken thread.

Excellently done. The first sentence brings up a subject, then the following sentences talk about it, all the while avoiding any visualization or explanation. 

Writing

This writing is excellent. I am out of my league with any critique of this work.

Additional Comments

People, learn from this person. He shows that the ONLY point of any good story is the people in it. I saw many tropes in the preview and none of them mattered.

Bravo, sir. Bravo!